Hey there, this seems like a good start! I like the fact that you have a structure in your mind with this one.

However, there is one thing I would love to point out. You should try staying within one key if you're only just starting with your compositions. This will help you learn basics really fast and get the hang of what sounds good and what doesn't.
Look up what a scale or key is and how you could use it for your own benefit! They are really handy and there's lots of them!

Also try playing around more with the percussion - it's one of the key elements of a track!

Keep listening to our beloved Dimrain and try recreating some of his tracks. This also would help you a ton! This is actually how I learned the ways :)

Remember, just have fun! And keep producing! I'm gonna wait to hear more.

It's so sad to hear Dimrain reference only for 10 seconds here, but the rest still holds up the quality! Great job, especially on the hard dubstep synths part. The snare is so OOMPH that even I Oomphed a little. Thank you, good person.

Yes! That's the spirit!